Moby Chair – A Succinct Trilogy

Posted on August 5, 2012 12:41 am under Microfiction
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Ahab cheered his transition from floating wreckage to tiny island, but a steady diet of coconuts was greeted with far less enthusiasm. (132)

When the great white chair washed up, he put aside former animosity, happy to have a companion, although he’d secretly hoped for Wilson. (137)

Chairy suggested a nap by the water’s edge. Ahab snored as the tide rushed in. When it ebbed, only Chairy remained. Smiling. (127)

Succinctly Yours offers a weekly photo and word as inspiration for your microfiction. How low can you go? Choose the 140 character or 140 word option.

This week’s word was transition.

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9 Responses to “Moby Chair – A Succinct Trilogy”

  1. Anthony North Says:
    August 5th, 2012 at 3:27 am

    Excellent, atmospheric micros. The last was definitely the best.

  2. Anders Says:
    August 5th, 2012 at 8:52 am

    I especially liked the first one. Nice. (｡◕‿◕｡)

  3. Jim Says:
    August 5th, 2012 at 1:42 pm

    Nice ones, GMa ~~ :) ~~ I’d like to comment on them a bit.

    1st one reminds me that he might try praying for mana.

    2nd one, I’m glad he didn’t get Wilson. There was cussing on that video

    3rd one I liked best. I’m not sure if Chairy was smiling because she gained from the relationship or if Ahab turned out to be a scoundrel? Those are the two options that came to mind, you can square me away as to what you were thinking. :)
    ..

  4. Grandma Says:
    August 5th, 2012 at 2:34 pm

    Good thoughts, Jim.

    I’m not a big fan of cussing, but if I got stranded on a deserted island, I would probably indulge in a bit of it.

    You probably guessed from the title, that Moby Dick was the inspiration for my tale. As you may remember, Captain Ahab sought revenge on the great white whale, who destroyed his boat and bit his leg off. In my version, Ahab sets aside his resentment in favor of companionship, but apparently Chairy does not.

  5. Pat Says:
    August 5th, 2012 at 7:36 pm

    Grandma, your trilogy is brilliant. I cracked up at the last one, especially at “When it ebbed, only Chairy remained. Smiling.” I also like the melding of Moby Dick and Castaway. I think Wilson would be a fine companion for anyone alone on an island.

  6. Judy Says:
    August 5th, 2012 at 8:59 pm

    Most of us would put up with considerably more than normal if there was no one else to be with.

  7. Akelamalu Says:
    August 6th, 2012 at 4:11 am

    I liked them all!

  8. Kay L. Davies Says:
    August 6th, 2012 at 10:50 am

    Three good ones here, for sure. I did manage to write ONE, but some day I might get to three. LOL
    Love the song Ebb Tide, although this doesn’t look like the Bobby Hatfield I remember so fondly. I saw him when he and Bill Medley had split up for a while, and he was singing with someone else. I asked his new partner (Jimmy something, I forget his last name) if they’d do Ebb Tide but he said it would be too hard on Bobby’s voice.
    Sigh.
    Thanks for including it here.
    K

  9. evenstarwen Says:
    August 8th, 2012 at 10:54 am

    Chairy! That cracked me up. So cute, yet so secretly evil. Love the trilogy as the perfect introduction to Succinctly Yours. Thanks for the laugh :)