Finding The Perfect Fit

Posted on August 26, 2013 10:18 pm under Microfiction
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Too Small
“I don’t carry shoes that big, Ma’am.”

“Maybe if I push harder. That old woman who lives down the lane gets lots of children in her shoe.” (138)

Too Big
His delighted sisters watched him disappear into the giant shoe. Sadly, EMT’s brought an x-ray machine to locate and retrieve him. (131)

Just Right
One salesman fetched shoes. Another chased her raucous kids. Mama sat and relaxed. She hated the shoes, but loved the free childcare. (136)

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This week’s word was x-ray.

3 Responses to “Finding The Perfect Fit”

  1. Jim Says:

    :) I like the saleman story, GMa. It reminded me of a Brown Shoe sales rep neighbor I had in New Hampshire.

    I went to Portmouth, Maine one Saturday with him while he was Customer Repp’ing at a shoe store. I don’t know if he ever sat with the kids but you have a great idea there.

  2. Pat Says:

    I like the idea of free child care at the shoe store, too!

    I liked the old-woman-who-lived-in-a-shoe allusion. I do think she had a bigger shoe than that.

    I can identify with the 3 sisters who wanted to ram their brother down to the bottom of the shoe because I’m one of three sisters and we often felt that way our brother who was a real pain-in-the-neck when he was young.

  3. Pat Says:

    …about our brother…