For The Price Of One

Posted on October 20, 2013 10:18 am under Microfiction
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Since I didn’t get to an entry last week, I decided to do double duty this week.

In her first swinging competition, keen skills defeated an older opponent. Future Olympic gold would pale in comparison to this moment. (135)

The thrill of victory. The agony of no feet. (45)

Stop! The restrooms are right over there. (43)

This week’s word was keen



“I started feeling poorly after I ate a bowl of stew.”

“Hmm. Sounds like a classic case of stuporitis.” (103)


The word of the week was stupor


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3 Responses to “For The Price Of One”

  1. Jim Says:

    :) Neat, GMa! I thought about the restrooms (haha) but resisted. You did good with yours.

    Did you know there is such a word, “stuporous”? :)

  2. Judy Sheldon-Walker Says:

    Wow! Your are so clever and Jim is clever too – stuporous? Well, I guess you are both right. I have no red zigzagged lines. lol

    I like your prediction for my grandlittle. Olympic gold hmm? The boy tickled me, he looked so unenthused!

  3. Pat Says:

    Childhood victories are definitely thrilling and do last a lifetime. Jerry won a national title in 1959 in the backstroke when he was ten years old. He still says that was the high point of his life, though I really think the high points in his life have been seeing our 3 sons and their sons doing well.

    I always enjoy your word play…as in “The agony of no feet.”

    Regarding the third one, it does look like the boy is relieving himself. The first thing that popped into my mind was that he was vomiting.